Polychrome...

[seawasp]

... Chapter 5, is now up, and Our Hero and Heroine are on their way...

Comments

[kengr]

Just noticed something in this rather long and complicated sentence (bold added):

She laughed, and saw his face looking up at her as she floated lightly in the air, and for a moment, she wondered at what she saw there; he seemed transfigured by her own joy, his blue eyes exultant yet wide and filled with something she could not quite recognize, something that made her miss a step, stumble subtly, an uneven movement that a mortal might not notice, but that was the clumsiest motion she had made in centuries.

My first thought when I hit the bolded part was that it should be "he saw there". Upon further reading, I decided that the "she" was correct, but it *is* a rather messy and convoluted thought.

[seawasp]

Well, it's her PoV, so she's the only one who COULD do any wondering.

[kengr]

Yeah, but SHE could be wondering at what HE saw in HER face.

That's how my brain wanted to parse it the first time through.

[seawasp]

Oh. You're reading it in a modern mode construction and that was in an older mode construction.