thanks for posting chapters. I've been enjoying them so far. are you interested in feedback?
For example, in the opening chapter, I wasn't sure if the setting was supposed to be nowish (in a slightly different history), very near future, or more in the future.
And in Chapter 3, I was at first a little slow picking up on why "New York City or Tokyo" would be "far, far smaller than two thousand kilometers". If Bronson was worried part of her audience would not immediately pick up on that, wouldn't she tailor her presentation to make that clear, such as comparing an entire time zone to a city?
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Date: 2025-03-08 06:44 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2025-03-13 06:32 pm (UTC)For example, in the opening chapter, I wasn't sure if the setting was supposed to be nowish (in a slightly different history), very near future, or more in the future.
And in Chapter 3, I was at first a little slow picking up on why "New York City or Tokyo" would be "far, far smaller than two thousand kilometers". If Bronson was worried part of her audience would not immediately pick up on that, wouldn't she tailor her presentation to make that clear, such as comparing an entire time zone to a city?
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Date: 2025-03-13 11:44 pm (UTC)Of course given current events it may be in an alternate history in which the USA doesn't torpedo itself.